I guess i'll be the first to comment... maybe your putting too much light on certain parts of the color... try starting your base with a dark sienna brown or tan peachy color.. then slowly part by part lighten the areas up with a slightly lighter peachy brown color... with flow at 30% or less.... then with linear dodge with a bigger brush stroke at 1 to 3% flow .. its acts like a substitute for a gradient, but it actually helps the pic get lighter carefully without overdoing the highlights...

the reason for the base to be colored dark is so it would be easy telling which areas need more light... u basically paint with light colors... then start using the brush at 1-3% flow on linear dodge to highlight small areas... i never use this brush that much cause it might ruin the already lighted colors..

this vid here will explain what i said easier k [link] even though its a speedpainting .. try observing why he starts with dark color as his base color...it gradually gets lighter when he adds light colors... don't do this with the brush set on linear dodge... dodge lightly after if u think it needs alittle tiny bit of light... not too much... just a tiny bit of dodge needed to get that effect at 1% flow set on linear dodge... also try color adjust if u hate the color... still never use dodge so much... k its only to higlight tiny areas... cause if u use it too much it will destroy the color...

as for the line colors... i'm not sure if u like black lines.. but if u choose to change the color of your lines... here's a tut for that... since he sorta made one on that which i find weird... ^__^

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i think i seen u doin this in the other pic with terry... so no worries...

Now for the good points... i really like the pose and i really like that face she gives off in her expression... ^__^ nice work bro

Wow, it's a really interesting way of coloring what you said! I usually do the inverse: first the clear tones and then the darker tones after. Sometimes the middle tones before, and so the darker and, in the sequence, the light. I'll try this, sir, yes!

Specifically about this pic, I'm trying to achieve some kind of fast result, and then this is the reason of the strong/explosion light. Have you saw Burst Angel/Bakuretsu Tenshi manga? Is black & white, yeah, but I keep imagining if that pages were colored. This is the kind of result I want for my comic. But this tips are also very useful for a more detailed painting.

Oh, and yes, I like the black lines, but I agree that the colored lineart gives another dimension to the pic. I'll watch the videos.

I'm happy for you have liked. ^_^